Nick,
Please find attached my recommended improvements for the video. Before reading them, please recognize that I'm trying to help you make this video perfect but recognize that perfection may not be possible given the available resources.
The scripts for this video are excellent. The newscaster is very attractive and reads remarkably well. Your narration is excellent. However, the demonstrations need a lot more work. The demonstrating cyclists must be taught, coached and rehearsed sufficiently so that they at least do not demonstrate dangerous behaviors such as riding on the wrong side of the street, weaving, not looking where they’re going, improperly scanning, signaling and executing stops and turns, and riding out from a driveway without looking.
Overall the video looks very professional and it is totally beautiful to see those kids on bikes and trying to do everything correctly. Thanks for your efforts so far.
Frank